Againts Human Trafficking Essay Response

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Against Human Trafficking

Essay Response

In this essay I am in favor on Prop.35 against human trafficking. In here I wanted to convince the audience to vote YES on proposition 35.

This essay had a great title and also in the intro the comment was that every quarter my writing just build up!. On my essay since we were also looking at the different fallacies in writing, I wanted to add some in my essay to look that I got the understanding of the fallacies, but it did not work as I was expecting it on the lat statement that I wrote in the second paragraph my teacher identify the fallacy. The purpose itself did not work, my teacher took it as a mistake; in some way I think is good because he find the intension of it, but it was a mistake n my essay, so the points went down, what I did here was a false dichotomy and appeal to fear and for this the argument went down.

Then on the third paragraph I wanted to include politics, so I did an ad hominem. The politicians as if it’s all of them, aren’t any support of it and do they all feel woman deserve rape.  I did not want to sound like all politicians just some that I mentioned later on in the essay. The next paragraph I have some great quotations to prove a powerful point about some politicians (all the right by the way). It is that opponents of this legislation seem to be anti-woman, anti feminist and against equality for woman. I wanted to be somewhat specific in this since I see prove of how these politicians were making bad commentaries about woman and rape. At the last argumentative paragraph I talk about the budget, but it came out negative for the essay; I did not focus on the budget so I mislead the audience to believe that it will negatively affect the budget. The conclusion overall was good. I need to focus on sentences and to focus on my paragraphs.

What I learn from this chapter, was to open my mind to some politics and to listen everyone’s opinion to different propositions, also I learn about fallacies which are Hasty Generalization, Missing the Point, Post Hoc and Slippery Slope.